The Ancient City
It was early winter. The gloomy and low sky made one feel suffocating. A fall of snow a couple of days before had before had brought to the city dwellers a touch of brightness, but now what an ugly scene reigned! The raw wind sent the snow on the tiles along the eaves whirling in the air in tiny bits and adroitly making its way down the necks of the pedestrians by way of their collars. The streets had become slushy by exposure to the prankish sun, and the thawing snow was dotted with traces of footsteps.
1,” 初冬的天，灰黯而且低垂，简直把?#25628;?#24471;吁不出一口气”译时分为两句，It was early winter. The gloomy and low sky made one feel suffocating.简洁恰当，是翻译时常用的手法。
2，“把?#25628;?#24471;吁不出一口气“即”使人感到窒息“，译为made one feel suffocating
3，“一些明朗“即”少许明朗“故译为a touch of brightness
4，“但雪后的景象可不堪了“即”但雪后的场景是多么不堪入目“译为but now what an ugly scene reigned!译者巧妙地用reign代替it is使得译文更加生动灵活
5，“极善选择地向路人脖颈里钻“意即”灵巧地往路人的脖子里钻“故译为adroitly making its way down the necks of the pedestrians by way of their collars.，其中by way of their collars（通过他们的衣领）是增益成分，原文虽无其词而有其意
综述：本段又出现了我们熟悉的拟人修辞，译者用whirl, make its way down,等动词 以及prankish等形容词很好地体现了出来~
A plane appeared out of the blue from a direction only too familiar to the local inhabitants, roaring to the alarm of everybody, on whose face was written memories of some previous horrors. Kids, who had been crawling about over ruts playing a game of small clay balls, now stopped to look up at the strange dragonfly in the sky, subconsciously feeling that something ominous was going to happen. However, they soon lowered their heads again to bury themselves in the messy game as soon as the dragonfly disappeared from view behind the treetops.
1，“飞机由一个熟悉的方面飞来了“意为”飞机突然由一个当地居民所熟悉的方向飞来了“，故译为A place appeared out of the blue from a direction only too familiar to the local inhabitants。其中out of the blue,我们在?#37117;?#24503;满都的狗》中见过，意为”突然地“，属增益成分，原文虽无其词而有其意。
2，“飞机由一个熟悉的方面飞来了，洪大的震响惊动了当地的居民。他们?#25104;?#21508;画着一些恐怖的回忆。“”他?#24688;?#21644;”居民“是重?#21916;?#20998;，可用定语从句进行合译为A plane appeared out of the blue from a direction only too familiar to the local inhabitants, roaring to the alarm of everybody, on whose face was written memories of some previous horrors.
综述：本段译文动词的使用十分精彩，如roar, written,crawl， bury oneself to。。。充分体现了原文生动简洁的语言风格，值得我们借鉴
That was a grey iron bird by no means a stranger to ancient city. Everybody knew it was a scout with a multitude of “buddies” right behind it. With its straight wings spread out, it swept past sturdy old trees, quiet tile-roofed dwellings and lakes of imperial gardens, and circled over dazzling glazed tiles. It kept flying and flying. The ancient city, like a clumsy old man sitting there with his numbed legs crossed, looked on helplessly in face of what was taking place before him.
1，“那是一只灰色的铁鸟。对这古城，它不是完全陌生的。“译为That was a grey iron bird by no means a stranger to ancient city. stranger 很好地体现了原文的修辞手法，两句合译也使得译文紧凑连贯
3，“盘着不能动弹的腿“意即”盘着失去知觉的的腿坐在那里“译为sitting there with his numbed legs crossed, sitting也是为了文章通顺增译的~
4，?#25226;?#30529;睁守着这一?#23567;?#21363;”无助地看着这一切在他眼前发生“译为looked on helplessly in face of what was taking place before him。
综述：本?#25105;?#26087;要借鉴译者精准的选词技巧~比如“?#20998;?#30340;“在此并不是“肥胖”的意?#36857;?#32780;应是“腿脚不灵便”之意，译者使用clumsy 就很好的体现了古城作为一个“老年人“的姿态，另外还有scout, sweep，sturdy等, 都是可以使文章升级的好词
The dark low archway of the city gate was thronged with tradesmen and pedestrians passing to and fro, each staring blankly ahead. Acting on the public warning ‘No discussing state affairs”, people had learned to keep their mouth closely shut. Yes, trouble seemed to be brewing. But they know not the trouble was between who and whom. Maybe they should store up more pickled vegetables just in case, and remember to burn joss sticks before the image of the kitchen god at home so as to get a blessing from heaven on all their folks.
1，“城门低暗的洞口正熙熙攘攘地过着商贾路人“译为The dark low archway of the city gate was thronged with tradesmen and pedestrians passing to and fro，译者在此采用了和原文一致的无灵主语做主语（好别扭~），不仅贴合了原文也有利于下一句”一个个直愣着呆呆的眼睛“的衔接~
2.“他?#19988;?#19981;知道是谁和谁“译为But they know not the trouble was between who and whom.其中know not 等于did not know,在否定句中省略助动词do 是古体英语，现仍见?#35857;?#38754;语中，有节约用字，语调顺口的修辞效果
3，“?#20945;?#33100;菜说不上得多备些的“意即”?#27531;?#24471;多备些腌菜，以防外一“译为Maybe they should store up more pickled vegetables just in case，just in case 为增译成分，原文虽无其词而有其意
4，“保平安“意即”得到上天的眷顾“译为so as to get a blessing from heaven on all their folks.
As the snow began to thaw under the sun, the corners of the city wall revealed scars of war. That was something left on it by history. History had sent great men to build the wall, and history had also sent tyrants to destroy it. Again and again, it had, in time of turmoil, suffered knife-cuts and bombardment for the sake of the common people. Now, nobody could tell what kind of fate was in store. Anyway the local people were surging like a tide into the city for shelter. A perfect barometer it was indeed – another conqueror was eyeing the ancient city greedily.
1，?#25226;?#20809;融化了城角的雪，一些残破的疤痕露出来了“本句两个分句表面上主语各不相同，但其实第二句的意思为“城角的疤痕露出来了?#20445;?#22240;此可以统一主语为“城角?#20445;?#35793;为As the snow began to thaw under the sun, the corners of the city wall revealed scars of war.
2，“面前它又面临怎样一份命运，没有人晓得”很明显可以合译为nobody could tell what kind of fate was in store.还可用await译为what kind of fate was awaiting it.
3,” 那是极好的晴雨表”译为A perfect barometer it was indeed…译者采用倒装的句型，加强语气~
The ancient city, like a clumsy old man bending low and gasping feebly, continued to watch over the group of innocent kids around him, his eyes brimming with tears.